By: Nataly Clark
Nataly Clark
English 102
Blog Post 4: Go explore
Long, winding dirt road. The rocky, earth underneath as you drive. The view that’s waiting for me at the bottom was worth the drive. Getting out of the car, I am met with the breathtaking overlook of our small, bustling town. The fresh air hits me as the trees around me move in the breeze. The grass beneath me has started to grow fresh and green. A sense of calmness washes over me. I look down at the town.
Below, you can hear the faint sound of cars on the busy street, going about their own lives. I can see the river lazily move along. I hear a noise as I turn to my right, I see two chipmunks scampering after each other in playful fashion. I decide to walk down one of the walking paths. The brown leaves underneath my feet crunch as I walk. The trees are just barely beginning to regenerate their greenery. The sun peaks through the clouds and falls in rays on the ground.
As I continue walking, I hear noises around me. I can hear the wind rustling through the trees above. Squirrels and chipmunks chatter to each other. I see robins fly by, calling to each other as they go. The air is sweet with the smell of spring. I stop to examine the shrubbery and the creatures that inhabit it.
A spider has spun its delicate, silk web in the base crook of a tree. Droplets of water from a fresh rain perch upon the moss and leaves. A centipede rushes by in a panicked manner. Others go about their business, doing their own thing. I decided to head back to my car and let them return to their own peacefulness.
Before I get back into the car, I steal one last glance at the view. It’s peaceful up here, just me and my thoughts. I never liked our town, never thought it had much to offer. This changes my perspective on things, even if it’s just for a little while. Everything can get so chaotic, it’s hard to remember to take a timeout and enjoy the world around you.
This is Washington Park, right in the heart of Warren. This, is my town.
Creative Minds 
I also love visiting Washington Park and I think this short essay does an amazing job of describing the area to someone who has never had the chance to visit. In the writing, there is a lot of imagery and adjectives that describe the scenery and atmosphere. The use of imagery and sensory words really creates an image for the reader and creates a sense of actually being at the park. I love the way you chose to write this paper and really go into detail and give the reader an in depth description of the park. Your style of writing is very encapsulating and it definitely kept me interested the whole time I was reading. Professor Miller asked us if we had any ideas as to how someone could make the message more clear or represent a place more vividly. In my opinion, you did a thorough job of describing the park and its atmosphere and making sure the reader was entertained. 62 I also like that you included your own emotions and how Washington Park makes you feel and how it makes you appreciate your town. I can definitely relate to disliking Warren and the main thing that brings me back around is visiting places such as Washington Park and the Kinzua Dam. Although this town can be very frustrating, I definitely love the nature that surrounds it and makes it all worth it. I also love the picture you chose! I find it so centering and interesting that so many people our age love to visit these certain places with their friends and embrace our town in the easiest way possible.
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Nataly,
Your writing was well developed. I love the way you put in so much detail to describe your adventure in the park. It was very descriptive and provided an extremely detailed picture for me to think of. I have never been to Washington park, as far as I know, but it sounds lovely based on your use of imagery. Your use of figurative language, such as personification in your writing, allowed me to have a better understanding of how the water was moving. This creates a more developed description that also keeps the story interesting. It allows the mind to stay creative. Based on the structure of your writing, the story is split in paragraphs based on what the writer is doing (ex. walking, observing, etc.). This allows the reader to keep up with each description you provide. In the beginning of your story, your words flowed so smoothly as if you were writing a poem. I thought at one point you were, but then it was not rhyming. It was just my brain thinking that they all rhymed because a few of them did. It is also almost twelve in the morning so my brain is not functioning properly anyways. Something I think you should have included was your drive to the park. It would have been nice to know how you were feeling heading to the park, how you got the idea to go there in the first place, and the motive behind your adventure. This just provides a better insight for the reader, and, if needed, more word count. I also believe something that was missing was me!! You should have invited me. I would have given you more to write about because we would both fall off a rock or die, which would make things get more difficult but interesting to say the least. Overall, it was a great story, and I am going with you next time! Enjoy your weekends away.
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